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    Inu No Ongaeshi - Shmarah - 48 Hour Compo Entry

    A short visual novel made with Ren'py that has 2 bad endings and 2... endings.
    Somewhat based off of the Japanese folk story, "Tsuru no Ongaeshi," also known as "The Crane Wife."
    In "Inu no Ongaeshi," you play a lonely freelance writer, if, with your lack of motivation, you can even call yourself that. One morning, you meet an injured dog in the forest- rather, a dog girl. A magical, evolving, speed-writing, food-conjuring, future seeing dog girl.
    Good luck with that.

    More of a story than it is a game, in how I approached writing it and how it plays. (Hence the term visual novel.) Unfortunately, I don't actually like the plot as a story; it feels a bit cliche. Forgive me. ;;;
    Controls:
    Click/Spacebar - Advance the text
    Right click/Esc - Open the in-game menu
    Scroll up - Rollback text (You can't rollback past important choices/scenes)
    Click- Clicking things. :-]

    This is my first Ludum Dare at the age of 14. I hope you enjoy the game.

    View Shmarah's journal. | View all entries by Shmarah

    Ratings

    Coolness93%
    #55Mood3.56
    #163Humor2.79
    #312Graphics3.09
    #316Overall3.07
    #333Audio2.53
    #433Theme2.74
    #503Fun2.54
    #529Innovation2.49

    Comments

    rylgh says ...
    Aug 27, 2012 @ 3:12am

    Heads up, Google Drive says I don't have permission to download the OS X or Windows builds.

    Rose says ...
    Aug 27, 2012 @ 3:14am

    I can't wait to try this game! But when I follow the OS/X link, Google Docs says I don't have permission to access this item...

    Shmarah says ...
    Aug 27, 2012 @ 3:30am

    Yikes! Should be fixed now.

    vicethal says ...
    Aug 27, 2012 @ 3:59am

    emotional story. Interesting take, to do a choose-your-own-adventure... very nicely done.

    mdkess says ...
    Aug 28, 2012 @ 1:37am

    This must have been a lot of fun to make! Well done.

    Aug 28, 2012 @ 2:29am

    Very interesting concept. Although, the story was quite long at points and hard to keep following.

    thewiseguy99 says ...
    Aug 28, 2012 @ 3:18am

    Cool idea, very different. I liked it/

    ggiraldez says ...
    Aug 28, 2012 @ 3:26am

    Nice story. Got the bad end #2 but I enjoyed it.

    sev_inf says ...
    Aug 28, 2012 @ 5:22am

    Liked it. Got ending #1, will try to get a better ending.

    johnfn says ...
    Aug 28, 2012 @ 6:29am

    OH MY GOD. That was incredible. The quality of your writing is outstanding, even more so that you're only 14! It's incredibly smart and funny. The ending is beautiful. I got ending 1. I looked over your source to make sure (I'm a horrible person!) and it seemed like I didn't really miss out on anything in the game.

    Great work. I hope to see a lot more from you!

    AirRider3 says ...
    Aug 28, 2012 @ 10:07am

    Brilliant! I loved the game. I tried to get all the endings. Cheers!

    Sergey Mohov says ...
    Aug 28, 2012 @ 9:19pm

    This is a brilliant piece of writing. I even had to get all of the endings, which never happened to me before :-) You're really good at this and you should continue writing.

    tastive says ...
    Aug 29, 2012 @ 2:21am

    Bravo! The Crane Wife influence is evident, but you've taken story more seriously so far than anyone else I've seen. Compelling to finish.

    daydalus says ...
    Aug 29, 2012 @ 2:43am

    Wow, definitely the most original game I've played so far. I like how you combined pictures with text, and the story was well written. Actually reminded me a bit of The Wind-Up Bird Chronicle by Murakami for some reason (stray animals and strange women). Would have liked to have a little bit more control of the dialog/story, but overall was a nice experience. Well done!

    rhysvdw says ...
    Aug 29, 2012 @ 2:43am

    I'm impressed by your writing and how polished this project is. However the dialogue went on for too long without any control from the player... There were many times where I'd have liked my character to have behaved differently. It felt a bit like a linear story with a few token options tacked on. Nonetheless, good work.

    davisan says ...
    Aug 29, 2012 @ 4:57am

    I loved this! The mood, text, backgrounds, sound effects. I got all the endings. I tried to make a visualnovel some years ago, but i never finished it.
    Nice work!

    mes says ...
    Aug 29, 2012 @ 5:01am

    Interesting to say the least, but I think you kind of have to be into the whole fur thing. Otherwise, it was well written and I thought filtering photos was a good way to get art done quickly. I would have liked more options to interact, however.

    Good work.

    Aug 29, 2012 @ 8:17pm

    I really liked the story. I got Bad Ending #2, but will most likely play it again to see the good ending. I wish there were more choices. You did a great job scenes and sounds.

    tmt_01 says ...
    Aug 30, 2012 @ 12:17am

    The game is great! I really liked it.
    But I wanted to stay with the dog girl... :(

    Gidaio says ...
    Aug 30, 2012 @ 12:22am

    This game was not fun. But it was engaging. It was brilliant and very interesting. Except it was more like a book, not a game. Yes, I understand the term 'visual novel.'

    Thurig says ...
    Aug 30, 2012 @ 8:41am

    Too bad, I can not download this for the Mac.

    Zed says ...
    Aug 30, 2012 @ 4:16pm

    That was really pretty. Quite well-written, good graphics but as someone previously commented, I'd have liked more choice. There are some things I actually felt myself getting angry about, when they happened (particularly the ending - I got ending #1). Please consider going further with this, and writing in more choice.

    DevWouter says ...
    Aug 30, 2012 @ 5:23pm

    A mother who jokes about getting a pet? I don't think my mom would have approved :)

    Anyway lovely story, maybe a new york best selling ;)

    localcoder says ...
    Sep 2, 2012 @ 9:05am

    I enjoyed this.

    There's a bug, where the game displays "Dearest %(name)s" instead of using the actual name.

    I played four times to get all the endings. I like how all of them are sad :')

    kibertoad says ...
    Sep 7, 2012 @ 11:16pm

    Was pretty meh till it got to the ending.
    Ending saved it.

    Sep 16, 2012 @ 5:07am

    Loved it! :) It's one of the few games I've played to the end. In fact, I played it more than once, to get a different ending (didn't discover the saving system the first time I played :/)

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